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Research-Based Argument Essay Reflection


I thought that I did really well at doing the DRAPES. The reason why is because I was able to use more than three different types of DRAPES, like the different techniques. The ones that I used for example are the facts and statistics, analogy or comparison, anecdote, and expert quotes. I feel as though I was able to really use my evidences and sync it into my piece. For example when I put in. One of my examples is using an anecdote and statistic in one, “For example, on Education.com, there was a report from a middle school in Peyton, Colorado and it said, ‘At Falcon Middle School in Peyton, Colorado, safety and discipline incidents dropped dramatically after the school introduced an in-school suspension program in 2001-2002. ‘We had 437 safety and disciplinary incidents in 2000-2001 [before in-school suspension],’ principal Bill Noxon told Education World. ‘In 2001-2002, we had 74.’ As you can see the amount of students going to suspension, had decreased by a lot, which shows that suspension is a great method for schools in order to discipline children, because without discipline kids would be very chaotic.”
Some of the most interesting crafts I learned was the closing. The reason why is because I learned different techniques on how to conclude my whole essay. I got to use the clincher statement and use a question. I used a question because I want that question to stick in the reader’s mind. I used the clincher statement because I wanted to kind of give a catchy fun ending so everything wouldn’t be so serious. I thought it really improved my performance because I was able to have a strong ending, that my reader would be able to go on my side and agree with me.

I think I need to improve on catchy titles and openings. The reason why is because in my title I didn't put much of a really catchy title that readers would want to read about. So on that one, I really need to work on making a title that will really catch the reader's eye and want to get plugged in about. I think I need to work on openings because in my partner and I's opening for our whole essay, when we tried to transition from one topic to another, it didn't flow well, and it was hard for us to be unbiased. So on that topic I want to work on being on equal sides and having everything flow together. i will achieve these things by really reading my piece thoroughly and out loud to see if it's too choppy, and for the title, I could ask my peers about different ideas and titles that would drag them in.


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